Some people think that the government is responsible for looking after the elderly. Others believe that it should be family members. Who do you think should take responsibility?

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People
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are divided on the subject of
age
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care
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for numerous reasons.
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essay will not only explain how public offices have enough financial capabilities to help these
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, and it will
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suggest how
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have sufficient family
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for taking
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of their parents. Governments should take responsibility for
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care
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services as they have sufficient financial resources.
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, not only do
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care
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facilities require finances for buildings and staff , but they
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need constant money to run their expensive day-to-day operations.
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age
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care
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people
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need various types of medicines, pampers and
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equipment which could be an extra burden on the families of old
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. In
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regard, public offices are in a better capacity to take
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of older
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in our society.
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, many
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argue that
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can better look after their family members. The reason is that family members can not only provide emotional
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by bringing their grandchildren which is
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important for their well-being at
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age
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, but they can
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 raise financial resources from other family relatives.
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,
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have a love for their parents which makes them help them.
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, In China, family relatives take full responsibility for food, medicines and financial
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of their old
people
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. In conclusion, we examined why governments should
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age
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care
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patients because of their rich resources, as well as how
individuals
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can provide better
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with the help of their relatives. In my opinion,
people
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should look after their own family members rather than trusting the government.
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