Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save the these traditions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
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hold the view that passing the information to others is the only way to save it. Both these views will be discussed adequately in Add the comma(s)
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culture
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destroyed
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then
it spread worldwide and these type of things become familiar with everybody and its importance automatically shrink and Linking Words
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decreased
.
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decrease
be decreased
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culture
and forget their own Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
culture
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activities
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result
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or other Use synonyms
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which spread the Change the wording
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pieces of stuff
culture
is the only way to save old festivals, languages and lifestyles. To exemplify, in India some ancient Use synonyms
activities
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such
as dance and songs become extinct, if tourists arrived in that area Linking Words
then
local people make profit from showing their skills and if they make money from old Linking Words
activities
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then
they like to passed their skills and tradition to Linking Words
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particular
region.
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the later
activities
. If these Use synonyms
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types
activities
passed from Use synonyms
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generation to Correct article usage
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the new
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