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Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #work #part #time #home
IT HAS BECOME COMMON DO
WORK
 ONLINE EITHER ONLINE OR OFFLINE ON THESE DAYS.
HOWEVER
, IT IS BELIEVED BY FEW FOLKS THAT ABOUT DOING
WORK
 FROM COMFORT JOIN BRINGS PLENTY OF PRONS, WHEREAS OTHERS GIVE OPPOSITE VIEWS.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN BOTH VIEWS ALONG WITH MY OPINION. THERE ARE A PLETHORA OF BENEFITS OF WORKING FROM
HOME
.
FIRSTLY
, IT IS NOT ONLY SAVE
TIME
 BUT
ALSO
 MONEY, BECAUSE WHEN ANY PERSON DO
WORK
 FROM
HOME
 THEY DO NOT NEED TO READY FOR OFFICES AND WASTE THEIR
TIME
 ON ROAD. TAKING THE EXAMPLE OF IT WORKERS WHO CAN DO THEIR
WORK
 FROM
HOME
.
IN ADDITION
 TO
THIS
, WORKING PEOPLE CAN MAKE STRONG RELATIONSHIPS WITH THEIR FAMILY. SINCE,WHEN THEY DO
WORK
 FROM
HOME
 THEY CAN ALLOCATE THEIR
TIME
 WITH LOVEONES. ACROSS THE WORLD MORE THAN HALF OF WOMEN CHOOSE TO
WORK
 FROM
HOME
 ,OWING TO FAMILY RESPONSIBILITIES.
THEREFORE
, IF
THIS
 FACILITY IS NOT AVAILABLE
THEN
 MANY PEOPLE LOSE THEIR JOB ESPECIALLY WOMEN.
NEVERTHELESS
, THOSE WHO WOULD ARGUE IN FAVOUR THAT ALL
WORK
 SHOULD BE DONE BY OFFICES DUE TO DIFFERENT SKILLS WHICH ARE IMPORTANT TO LEARN IN WORKING LIFE INCLUDING COMMUNICATION, TEAMWORK, CONFIDENCE AND OTHERS WHICH ARE NOT POSSIBLE AT
HOME
. WHAT IS MORE,ONLINE JOBS ARE NOT SUITABLE FOR ALL WORKS
SUCH
 AS CHEF, AND OTHERS PRACTICALS.
FOR EXAMPLE
, IT WAS PUBLISHED IN THE NEWSPAPER THAT ABOUT 67% OF EMPLOYEES WHO DID NOT IMPROVE THEIR SKILLS DID JOB ONLINE WHEREAS WHO WENT OFFICES. TO CONCLUDE,
ALTHOUGH
 EMPLOYEES CAN DO
WORK
 FROM THEIR COMFORT JOIN AND BRINGS BENEFITS
SUCH
 AS SAVING
TIME
 AND TRANSPORT COST YET THEY CANNOT IMPROVE THEIR SKILLS. IN MY WAY OF THINKING WORKING ONLINE IS BETTER BECAUSE IT GIVES FLEXIBLE TIMING.
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