Many believe that modern technology has people together, but others say it has driven us apart. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people deem that cutting edge
technology
brought individuals together. Others however
hold the view
that it has made the distance
between humans. Both these views will be discussed adequately in the ensuing paragraphs. I will gives
my opinion in the conclusion paragraph.
To commence with, the former Change the verb form
give
view
. It is suggested that the main advantages of the advanced facilities are greater interaction with mankind. In the modern era
people like to communicate with others through online social media applications. To explain it, nowadays most Add a comma
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of
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businesses
run through video Add an article
the businesses
conference
and online chatting. Because of Fix the agreement mistake
conferences
this
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humans from different countries and cultures are attracted Add a comma
,accommodation
towards
each Change preposition
to
others
. Change to a singular noun
other
For example
, India's prime minister Narendra Modi is used to with
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apply
the
advanced Correct article usage
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technology
for their virtual meetings and conferences with other countries minister
and businessmen and he is trying to be connected with everyone around the globe.
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ministers
On the other hand
, persons think that because of advanced technology
distance
between mankind are increase
. To explain Change the verb form
increases
this
statement, children are attracted to computer games and online platforms. Because of ,that they are do not made efforts to communicate with guests and remain busy with their phones. For example
, a recent survey says that people were busy in
their phones at several family functions and even sometimes they did not know that who set beside them. Nowadays, humankind loves to make new friends on Change preposition
with
the
social media but Correct article usage
apply
not
interested in maintaining old Add a missing verb
is not
relation
. These type of activities results in the more and more Fix the agreement mistake
relations
distance
between public.
To conclude, I strongly opine with the later view
, There are absolutely some great advantages of former view
but because of new technology
importance of old relation is fallen down and distance
between humans are
increasing.Change the verb form
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite