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1. Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbours #cities
When we grow up in a large society ,not like a small town or a village it makes a huge difference in communication with neighbours . In , the fact it is hard to keep in touch with them Because the area decided that when we work or study they do not have time to get known each other they are busy in their life and some of them not trust any people who move recently to city . The large cities do not reflect the small cities. When you go to the tiny city you can see how people there like a family as a peer group. But there are a lot of solutions to avoid break relations with neighbour's Neighbours
such
 as invite them to a cup of tea or have dinner. Ask them if they need any hand of help. Give them a gift and show them a peak emotional because they are your neighbours In the ,end if one of the Neighbor's take the
first
 step to great and meet the new or even old neighbour's they will change and be as one family .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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