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Many people use distance learning programmes to study at home, but others think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending collage or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Although
 many people believe that learning online is better than learning in a physical classroom, I think in a reverse manner. So, I completely disagree with the statement and here, I discuss all the points regarding the situation with relevant examples.
In contrast
, out of all the arguments of the topic, the strongest one that proves my view is the teacher cannot provide individual attention and cannot help individuals who have difficulties in understanding subject matters in the distance method when comparing with the traditional method.
Moreover
, it can
further
 discuss by taking an example. Distance learners had to spend in front of the screen and teachers
also
 have stayed in the same way.
However
, if the teacher has many
students
 and a small screen, the teacher cannot see all the
students
.
As a result
 that ,she is unable to find who are the real learners or not.
Furthermore
 , if there is a signal issue like a network error, some
students
 are unable to get all the parts of the lesson if they are not provided recordings.
Then
, it may cause to make disappointment among
such
students
.
Next
, while
students
 learning subject matters on the academic side,there should be a development in the physical, mental health as well as communication skills of a child.
For example
, the learner who already got merits in the political stream but he unable to address a mass audience may be a large problem of his personality.
Instead
 of that traditional method helps to overcome
such
 things using a variety of teaching methods by teachers to all the learners. Because of that, If there is a lack of physical, mental and social skills leads to make some health issues
such
 as phobia, stress...etc.
Thus
, to wrap the discussion, it can be said that despite points of agreed for learning online, my reasons for disagreement is strong and logical as well as it can give more merits than demerits
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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