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You are watching television and saw a program being shown early in the morning that contained a lot of violence. You believe the program is unsuitable for that time of day. Write a letter to the manager of the television station. In your letter :- Give reason for writing. Explain what you think the problem is with the program. Say what you would like the station manager to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to advise you that the crime TV dramas which are
broadcasted
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broadcast
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 on your channel in the morning should be shown at some other time of the
day
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. Morning is the new beginning of the
day
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 and
human
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the human
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 mind is fresh and at peace.
Therefore
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, it is an inappropriate time for these
type
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types
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 of TV shows. Explaining
further
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, people start afresh in the morning and get ready to leave for work. It is a perfect time to start a
day
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 with
postive
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positive
 thinking and good vibes. In my opinion, motivational programmes which
improves
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improve
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 the mood and encourage the person for
happy
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the happy
a happy
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 and cheerful
day
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 should be telecasted during the
intital
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initial
 hours of the
day
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. Crime shows are important and cannot be neglected, as
it
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they
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 aware
individual
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individuals
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to be
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apply
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safe and secure at home and in
the
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apply
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public. But, it makes the
day
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 gloomy and
depressed
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depressing
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, making the person feel irritated and negative
throught out
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throughout
 the
day
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. I hope you will consider my feedback and will make
necessary
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the necessary
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 changes to the order of shows being aired on your channel, keeping in my the experience of your esteemed viewers. Yours faithfully, JK

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task response
Be more specific about the type of violence shown in the program to strengthen your argument.
task response
Avoid minor grammatical errors, such as 'broadcasted' instead of 'broadcast', for higher accuracy.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures to enhance the flow of the letter.
task response
The letter clearly explains the issue and provides a strong reason for the complaint.
suitable writing tone
The tone is polite and appropriate for a formal letter.
logical structure
The paragraphs are logically structured, making the letter easy to follow.
single idea per paragraph
A separate paragraph introduces each main point, helping to keep the ideas organized.
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