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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days, many parents are sending
children
 to private
schools
. It is argued that families should not spend extra taxes on the
state
schools
, while they spend
money
 on the private educational systems. In
this
 essay, I aim to elaborate my agreement in the following statements. It is considered that private
schools
 are provided for many kinds of parents who are poor or can effort to register their
children
.
In other words
, individual
schools
 are kind of
state
schools
 but there is
quite
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difference
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different
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. These
schools
 are a bit cost a fortune and some
children
 who were not able to register in
state
schools
, can apply for private
schools
.
Although
this
 would be a type of
state
 school, they are not exactly the same. Families should spend more
money
 applying their
children
 to these
schools
.
Furthermore
, when solo
schools
 gain
money
, they can provide more facilities for schoolers. To clarify the matter, these places behave individually to spend their
money
 for developing their school facilities.
For example
,
schools
 are hired professional teachers who are really talented and they can provide extra classes for
children
 to learn more and better when the regular classes are not satisfying. In conclusion,
although
 private
schools
 are established by the government, I would say there is no need to pay extra, while parents already apply for private
schools
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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