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Inspite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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The probable growth of production across the world has been demonstrated by the given pie diagrams, which is determined by sector. Overall, after a fleeting glance, it is clear that each and every category mentioned in the illustrations will significantly enhance their progression in the coming days, except for two sections. According to the representations of 2040, the manufacturing unit will occupy the major area after service sectors, settling at 31% and 40% respectively. In fact,
this
 trend will remain constant after twenty years;
although
, the percentage will vary by 33% and 41% precisely. The energy accounts for 7%, but after two decades it will diminish slightly by 2% exactly. There will be a slight enhancement of one per cent in the info-com tech and the materials companies. Meanwhile, agriculture, which is displaying only a 1% production rate of the total in 2060, has reduced by 3% as compares to the earlier projection.
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