Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behaviour and protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. To what extent do you agree to disagree?

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As the Internet is becoming more and more popular these days, it has taken up a significant amount of everyone’s daytime. To be honest, sometimes, it can easily make us distracted, especially from work and study. There come so many occasions that I waste hours digging in social networks in working time. Maybe today I can share with you one among those moments.

Last

Tuesday, I went to the office earlier than usual. That meant I had 30 minutes for my personal things before starting a new working day. After turning on the computer, I thought it was okay if I checked my friend’s updates on Facebook for a while,

then

I would do some healthy exercise.

However

, as I went through my newsfeed, I saw a post from one of my

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and it was about the football match.

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, I watched that video of football players

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, coach’s

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, and even watched a highlight of the match. It’s not until my colleague called me to ask for the documents that I realized that I had wasted too much time on Facebook. To be honest, though surfing the Internet or joining in social networks can bring me a lot of benefits or knowledge, in

such

a mentioned situation, it was really a waste of time as I had other tasks to finish. If I had continued to watch, I couldn’t have met the deadlines for my task, and that can lead to a serious consequence, not only for me but

also

for the company on the whole.

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behaviour and protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. To what extent do you agree to disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads

Public celebrations (national days, festivals) are held in many countries. Some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.