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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give you opinion.

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Internet
 and its growth have changed the whole world on how it is functioning. Both are true that the
internet
 has brought people closer as well as made them isolated from their families. The brighter side of using the
internet
 is that we can learn a lot of stuff related to education, work, cooking, entertainment, technology and even read news online.
Also
, the
internet
 has made people find their old friends and get in touch with them even after several years through social media's abilities. Nowadays, the younger generation uses the
internet
 most efficiently to browse for topics like how to code, how to wear makeup, how to wear a saree, how to understated the settings of a DSLR camera, what destination can be visited for trips, upcoming trends in technologies, job opportunities, happenings around the world or news. We
also
 have a lot of options for entertainment over the
internet
 on the OTT platforms for watching movies, serials, web series, documentaries etc, Families who are living abroad are
also
 now able to connect with their families seamlessly over the video calls for gatherings. During when the pandemic hit all of us, most businesses survived because of the
internet
 and its ability to connect society from the remote for their work. On the dark side,unfortunately, the
internet
 has
also
 got a lot of things that can become an addiction to some populations. Like playing games online, watching a web series continuously, surfing social media etc, Some crowd become addicted and forget that they have a family to spend time with and take care of their parents in their old age.
As a result
, most of the adults in the home feel isolated or separated from their beloved ones.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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