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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? Give reasons with relevant examples

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Few of us are optimistic that soon every job does by
humans
 will be replaced by man-made
robots
 built with artificial intelligence. It is most ideal to achieve the state but I feel that it is rubbish to presume. I opine that machines have certain limitations and cannot be replaced easily by
humans
. They perform all the actions like human touch when one is crying or in grief. Let me discuss the same in the
next
 few paragraphs.
To begin
 with,
humans
 always enjoyed inventions and today we have for the same reason we have
robots
.
Robots
 are great electronic devices built with artificial intelligence that perform duties as instructed.
For example
,
robots
 are widely used in the role of detecting and diffusing bombs, serving food at a restaurant.
Moreover
,
robots
 are ideal in jobs where human lives can be saved.
On the other hand
, we want to extend the advantages of our inventions and try to implement benefits in all possible ways. But it may not be feasible at all times.
For example
, a robot cannot replace a mother or a teacher. Robot's do not have any natural emotions which are required while performing certain jobs. A robot cannot take its own decision to avert damage or decide if a drive can be postponed, in case of heavy rain.
Humans
 are good at taking a stand based on the situation they are in. For
this
 distinct reason, though
robots
 can perform certain operations,
humans
 are irreplaceable. To conclude, I opine that technology should be used to benefit
humans
 than replacing them, though artificial intelligence built
robots
 support mankind in achieving desired tasks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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