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Write about the following topic: Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there are several ways of learning. Some experts suggest that
students
 can learn from
home
 by using technology
such
 as
internet
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 or television programs as a tool of learning. Others argue that it will not as effective as attending the classes at school. Personally, I totally agree that studying at
home
 can bring the appropriate results because they can freely choose whatever and whenever they want to study.
Home
 school learning programs are created based on
student's
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students'
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interesting
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 and abilities. It can be adapted from whatever
students
 are interested
.
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 The process of learning can be advanced and have multiple sources from online programs which can enlighten
for
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each
of
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student while attending the
class
 the
students
 cannot be chosen whatever they want and how they can learn.
In addition
,
studying
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 at
home
, learners can spend unlimited time on learning. There is no specific time of starting or ending. They can take a break whenever they feel exhausted or lack
of
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concentration.
For
instance
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 if
students
 do not understand
in
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some topics, they can immediately stop the online program and rerun that part to teach them again while attending the
class
 can not. So,
this
 method
help
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 them to get better result of learning than attending the
class
. In conclusion, even taking time in
class
 can create a chance for learning by face to face communication between
students
 and teachers, learning at
home
 can bring
the
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equal effective benefits. Being chosen what and when to learn,
students
 can lead to the perfect outcome.
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