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Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is undeniable that many
parents
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 at present have many options in terms of
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 to choose for their children
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 as public
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, private
schools
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 and international
schools
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, resulting in some
parents
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 think that if they send their kids to private or international
schools
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, they will not pay educational
taxes
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 for the
state
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 governments. From my point of view, I disagree with
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 statement for many reasons which will be outlined in the detail in the following paragraph. It is true to say that some families who send their children to private
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 may agree with that movement because they claim that they dramatically pay the
money
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 for term fees of their children, and why do they pay
taxes
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 to
support
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 education for public
schools
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.
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, they think that they are buying
school
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 supplies and other materials for their kids by themself without supporting the
state
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union
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 in their country.
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,
parents
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 are spending
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majority
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money
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 on
school
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 uniforms, books, pens and other resources with their own income.
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, others, including me, disagree with
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 statement because educational
taxes
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 not only
support
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 public
schools
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 but
also
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support
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 private
schools
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 as well, while it may be a little, compared with government-financed
schools
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.
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, students in Thailand in private
schools
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 can be supported by
state
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 grants in the ways of supporting academic subjects.
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, the
state
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union
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 will help
school
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 owners to reduce a business tax and a land tax,
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, students will not pay
money
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 for their tuition fees too much. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with that viewpoint because paying
taxes
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 can help the
state
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union
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 improve the educational systems in the ways of others
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 like they can create the public building for learning to younger people ,and they can make some activities to
support
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 cognitive skills of young persons when they have enough
money
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.
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, it is recommended that many
parents
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 should pay
taxes
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 to encourage their
state
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union
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 to develop the educational systems because it will be beneficial for their kids.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Inequality
  • Socio-economic groups
  • Public good
  • Well-educated population
  • Double payment argument
  • Tax base
  • Infrastructure
  • Qualified teachers
  • Choice and privilege
  • Tax credits
  • Deductions
  • Exempting
  • Public education
  • Funding
  • Resources
  • Collective responsibility
  • Educational quality
  • Directly benefit
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