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In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parents from the time they began studies or work and until they married,do you think there are more advatanges or disadavantages to this trend?

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As soon as unattached youthful
individual
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 start working or studying in institution’s of higher learning they separate themselves from their guardians till they get hitched ,
this
 is common in many countries.
i
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 will explore both the advantages and disadvantages Young unaccompanied people have moved out of their
parents
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parent's
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 houses and started living
by
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 their own
this
 not only brings out personal responsibility in them but
also
 growth and maturity,a person at 18years of age who decides to stay afar from
parents
 growth is
emminent
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imminent
,maturity will be easily manifested in
this
 individual
thus
 contributing to independency.Another advantage is that
this
 individual is in a position to plan their life early enough.
for example
,if he or she is working they will learn to work with a budget
hence
 planning for necessities and not wants impulse buying will rarely occur in
this
persons
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 accounts because they are keen on the necessities.
However
,there are disadvantages to
this
 as well whereby unwedded young man or woman will consider
this
 as a way of acquiring freedom and is entitled to do whatever it is they have ever wished to do without a
parents
 eye keeping watch over them,most of
this
 human beings lead life’s that are so crooked engaging in illegal activities just to earn extra coin to sustain their crooked lifestyle.
For instance
,what is happening in
ourinstitution’s
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our institution's
our institutions
 of higher learning ladies have sunk deep into prostitution and men in drugs and other inappropriate behaviour in the name of freedom . In conclusion,whippersnappers will be required to be under
parents
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 watch till they attain a certain age
for example
 25 years at
this
 age one is sober in making decisions and they know how they want their life to turn out in the near future.
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