Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles a child’s natural talents, various professionals have pushed for an education revolution. Are there alternatives in the education system? Is traditional education doing more harm than good?

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Change in the learning systems is a consideration among a few people to improve on learners strong points and a quest for deeper understanding in their studies,the old system has created rules that are not necessary to the pupils.The ancient methodology of learning in our schools has caged students in a single circle whereby they are forced to believe and understand that professionals are the only people that do well in life .
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has created discipline among learners and adherence,but
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has created stringent laws that scholars are putting up with just to avoid punishment from their tutors.
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training is not a factor in conservative upskills
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does not bring out the capacity in a scholar
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coaching them is not a priority
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destroys the
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abilities and confidence. On the
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,a haul in the orthodox guidance should be considered and introduction of coaching novices basing on
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ready to face the world ,who will not solely depend on
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employment but
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of skills and talents will create more
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,as the saying goes",Education is the key",
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of both habitual and modern ways of enlightening finalists will create a good package producing people that are dependable in creating a stable economy.
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