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Governments should make people responsible for their own local environment. Do you agree or disagree?

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The
environment
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 is a crucial part of our life. There have been debates about whether local
people
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 should be responsible for their local
environment
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 or not. Some think that
governments
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 should make
people
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 responsible for the protection of their local
environment
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, while others take a position against it. I,
however
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, disagree with the given statement.
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, local
people
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 do not have enough financial resources to look after their surrounding
environment
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. Looking after
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environment
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the environment
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 needs a lot of time and effort, while many local
people
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 cannot sacrifice their job and family commitments to do so.
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, protecting the
environment
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 costs an arm and a leg, and many inhabitants cannot afford to upset their family budget in order to do activities
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 as buying trees and flowers and planting them in their
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. Apart from that, a city needs to be balanced in terms of infrastructure and making
people
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 the only responsible ones for saving the
environment
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 is likely to lead to an inconsistency in the city.
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,
governments
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 are the greatest sectors in every country and have
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 amount of budget.
This
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 budget has come from many resources
such
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 as taxes paid by citizens and is supposed to be spent in various departments
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 as
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environment
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environmental
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 protection. There are some duties,
such
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 as recycling, that local
people
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 are not able to do. Thinking of a region where the
governments
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 and municipalities do not provide citizens with huge trash cans. In
this
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 case, where do the local inhabitants suppose to discard their household wastes? In conclusion,
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 there are minor steps by which
people
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 can protect their
environment
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, in my opinion, when it comes to protecting the
environment
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, locally or nationally, the role of
governments
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 and other officials cannot be denied, and in
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 regard, local
people
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 should take the backseat.
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