More and more people are seriously overweight. Some people suggest the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays obesity is one of the most widespread problems in the world, which can be solved, according to some human propositions, by establishing high prices on processing
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. I disagree with
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essay will discuss the phenomena of obesity. The main reason which leads to appearing the above-mentioned problem is not only processing
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, but a non-healthy and sedentary lifestyle in general and following measures can probably settle
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. The decrease in processing food consumption can be achieved through the prohibition of fast-food advertisements. That kind of advertising appears in movies, internet games, mobile apps, sports games, tabloids,
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it can be seen in almost every crowded place. People, especially youth, can fall under the influence of that propaganda. If the government made the prohibition law for that kind of advertisement, the rise of usage of fast
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would stop. At the same time, as the
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measure, governments can impose an excise tax on fattening
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measure perhaps may reduce the number of fast-food restaurants and, by decreasing the access to that kind of
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, can decline its consumption. It is
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important to promote a healthy lifestyle, through open areas with different free sports facilities, introduce free courts for sporting games, organizing sporting events. Every person, in a different part of their life, may need access to convenient and inexpensive
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, students, individuals who come from other cities and others, who do not have time or opportunity to prepare meals. Taking into account, that increasing prices of processing
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might not bring the results,
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can lead to mentioned inconvenience. According to the essay, several methods, which can help to solve the problem of human overweight do exist. In my opinion,
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raising the price
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special types of
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would not be able to solve the global problem of obesity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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