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Writing Samples
Band 7

You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • Explain why you want to take time off work • Give details of the amount of time you need • Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing you a letter to inform you that I will not be available for 2 days because of show my
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 around the
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 where my
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 have never set foot in. My
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 who have not been to
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 are coming to visit me at the weekends.
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 is because they have been planning to see the local attractions for years. So they will be able to shop around and try out mouth-watering meals. I will be fully responsible for guiding them through the
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 is simply because I have advanced knowledge of geography and locating places. To do so, I might need only two days which are Saturday and Sunday in order to guide them around the
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. We are about to start our journey with Dubai Mall which is a shopper`s paradise and will end our trip to Dubai with the Historical museum which is mainly called the trip to the past. Visiting
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 beautiful places will be a golden opportunity to recharge their batteries.
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 I am showing my
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 around the
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 at the weekend, my friend, John, will be in charge of my carrying out responsibilities at work.
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 is because he has been trained for 10 days to replace me at the weekend. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon Yours faithfully, Omondavlat Ikramov

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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, make sure to directly address all points of the prompt in an organized manner. For this letter, mention specifically why taking time off work is necessary and suggest a clear, feasible plan for how your work could be covered. Including more direct responses and a stronger reasoning for the time off will enhance this aspect.
Task Achievement
For a more suitable writing tone, consider being more formal in your letter. Use phrases such as 'I would like to request' when asking for time off and 'I propose that' when suggesting how your work could be covered. Avoid colloquial language and ensure your letter maintains a professional tone throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve logical structure, ensure your letter follows a clear, logical progression from introduction through to your request and its justification, ending with a conclusion. Consider using transitional phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
For a higher score in greeting and closing, consider using more appropriate salutations and closings. If you know your manager's name, use it instead of 'Sir or Madam'. A more personalized closing, such as 'Kind regards' or 'Sincerely', followed by your full name, would be more suitable.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance the coherence of your letter, focus on developing a single idea thoroughly in each paragraph. Discuss one main point per paragraph, such as the reason for your absence, the duration needed, and plans for covering your duties. This structure will better guide the reader through your request.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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