It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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the backbone of the country, and it is essential to let them know if they doing
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, it is
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and teacher duty to teach their
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the difference.
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, there are many ways to let youngsters learn the difference between
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and
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but the punishment should not include, in order to make
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realize which one is a bad habit.
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with, humans always make a mistake even adults, elders or
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, if parents or teachers use punishment, it is
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that
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will obey their lesson for the
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time.
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, it will cause youngling to have less
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and make more problem in the future. According to the research, many
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that have been punished are more likely
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up as violent
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more than the other. In
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, For those parents and teachers who use the punishment, the
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will have a bad memory about their adults or
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worst case the kid hates their parent or teacher.
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, if
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cannot teach them, it will be a hard situation once there are no more people who can teach the kid. And it will trigger many serious problems in societies
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chaos in the societies. In summary, I can't entirely agree with
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statement, according to the former and latter
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that had been discussed.
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when they make a mistake, parents and teachers should talk to them with reason, it is one of the ways that I suggest adults
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teach the kid.
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way will make more
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learn precisely more than
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them.
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be a reasonable person once they become
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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