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The world should have only one government rather than a national government for each country. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, in the complex
world
, every
countries
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 have their own national governments who have authority to take responsibility of ruling their own nations within their territories. Some experts suggest that the whole
world
 should be ruled by only
one
government
. Before taking
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side
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,
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 comparison of both benefits and drawbacks is necessary. Having
one
government
 for the whole
world
 can lead to
the
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 leap forward
development
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 because all nations will become
one
. All policies, laws and regulations should
be make
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 in order to achieve the same destination. Every
countries
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 will do whatever they can to reach that goal.
For instance
, if the
government
 has a policy about developing
in
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technology, every
countries
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 will coordinate with each other to improve their abilities. Ruling under
single
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government
, each country can use the idea that originated by other
countries
 for
further
developing
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. It will save time and energy resources.
Moreover
, any conflicts of laws relating to the difference of boundary can be automatically removed.
However
, if the whole
world
 have only
one
government
, the diversity of
countries
 in the
world
 will be demolished. All cultures, language, foods which managed by the same organization will turn into the same.
Therefore
, people will no longer enjoy
traveling
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 in various
countries
 because there
is
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 no more interesting things to be discovered.
In addition
, some problems need to be solved by variety
opinions
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 and the
facts
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 that no
one
 knows
no
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one
 knows how to solve their problems better
that
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 their own nation cannot be replaced. Having considered
this
 matter carefully, even though the whole
world
 can be ruled by
single
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government
, the diversity of
government
 should be applied.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • centralized policies
  • international cooperation
  • global economy
  • trade barriers
  • military spending
  • authoritarian control
  • cultural diversity
  • national identities
  • local issues
  • homogenized
  • decision-making
  • democratic representation
  • world peacekeeping force
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