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Some people think that the government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects to make progress. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people think that the government should invest more money in
science
subject
 for development while others think that other subjects like social and craft are
also
 important as same as a
science
subject
. In my view, I partially agree with
this
 idea. In the following paragraph, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, investing in teaching
science
 is an important strategy in the developed country, and plays a key role in term of logical thinking that makes people improves the quality of life. A well-known example of investing budget in teaching
science
 is Google, the giant technology company still spend on research and development (R&D), it focuses on fundamental scientific research and
art
subject
 to make improvements and getting new ideas to market.
As a result
, investing in
science
subject
 provide own technology and innovation.
On the other hand
, social and
art
 subjects play an important role in the development of physical condition and feelings. Nowadays, many people still want to learn the
art
 of socializing for communication with each other. As mentioned in the previous paragraph, The company of Google
also
 needs to invest in
art
 education at the same time for developing products in order to communicate to customers apply the true essence and to persuade them to buy more products. It is clear that the other
subject
 it would be great to support in a
science
subject
. In conclusion,
this
 essay has discussed the reason to agree with the government should invest a lot of money in
science
 area for creating innovation to improve quality of life , while others reason disagrees with
this
 idea.
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