Childhood obesity is a growing public health crisis. In your opinion, what are the reasons for this and what can be done to tackle this issue?

Now, it is seen that children`s issue connected with overweight is
raising
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day by day. The probable cause for the problem is fast
food
restaurants and possible ways to rectify
this
will be keeping
the
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healthy lifestyle. Currently, junk
food
restaurants are staying too popular among many people and children of course are
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no
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not
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exception
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. Because of eating junk and
also
fat
food
and consuming an abundance of sugar that soda and candies contain children are facing
this
unpleasant outcome.
For instance
,
according to
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the
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research that recently has been accomplished by Chinese
scientist
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scientists
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from AE company illustrated that even only 1 slice of pizza that looks like a light snack at the
first
blush contains 32 types of unsaturated fats and virtually 220 calories.
Also
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it is proved that sugars from candies and soda are not common ones like glucose and fructose, they are actually strong sugars as same as galactose that easily break up
its
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structure to become fat in our organisms. Every issue has its solution, and in
this
case
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for preventing and tackling
obesity
it is more suitable to keep
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle. Usually,
obesity
arises when extra calories from
food
and unhealthy ration aren`t consumed or burnt so these calories in
this
situation become fat in
organism
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. Engaging in
sport
and keeping healthy
ration
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as well utilize
this
fat and rectify the overweight. As an
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I want to consider my friend Sayat`s history about
obesity
. Approximately 2 years ago he had
same
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problem, he suffered from fatness
then
by recommendation of doctors of our local medical
center
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he commenced to do
sport
. After
sometime
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he could lose weight and keep fit as well. From his words
sport
is
dominant
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the dominant
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factor in solving issues connected with extra weight. To conclude, we have found that nowadays
dominant
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cause for
obesity
across children is fast
food
restaurants and reliable ways for solving the issue is keeping the
sport
and healthy lifestyle.
Obesity
is
common
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popular problem
among
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childhood.
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