Childhood obesity is a growing public health crisis. In your opinion, what are the reasons for this and what can be done to tackle this issue?

Now, it is seen that children`s issue connected with overweight is

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day by day. The probable cause for the problem is fast

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restaurants and possible ways to rectify

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will be keeping

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healthy lifestyle. Currently, junk

food

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restaurants are staying too popular among many people and children of course are

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exception

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. Because of eating junk and

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fat

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and consuming an abundance of sugar that soda and candies contain children are facing

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unpleasant outcome.

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research that recently has been accomplished by Chinese

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from AE company illustrated that even only 1 slice of pizza that looks like a light snack at the

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blush contains 32 types of unsaturated fats and virtually 220 calories.

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it is proved that sugars from candies and soda are not common ones like glucose and fructose, they are actually strong sugars as same as galactose that easily break up

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structure to become fat in our organisms. Every issue has its solution, and in

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for preventing and tackling

obesity

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it is more suitable to keep

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lifestyle. Usually,

obesity

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arises when extra calories from

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and unhealthy ration aren`t consumed or burnt so these calories in

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situation become fat in

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. Engaging in

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and keeping healthy

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as well utilize

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fat and rectify the overweight. As an

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I want to consider my friend Sayat`s history about

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. Approximately 2 years ago he had

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problem, he suffered from fatness

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by recommendation of doctors of our local medical

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he commenced to do

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. After

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he could lose weight and keep fit as well. From his words

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is

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factor in solving issues connected with extra weight. To conclude, we have found that nowadays

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cause for

obesity

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across children is fast

food

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restaurants and reliable ways for solving the issue is keeping the

sport

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and healthy lifestyle.

Obesity

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is

common

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popular problem

among

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childhood.