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A reporter complained about a new TV program that you like. Write a letter to the newspaper editor.- Describe your point of view. - Say what you like about the show and why. - Ask the newspaper to take some action.

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 letter to express my dissatisfaction with a reporter who complained regarding a new program on the Sony channel as it presented that content of the show ,Fear Factor was not suitable for geriatrics and children below 10 years as stunts performed in one of the episodes was quite risky if any of the kids perform they could put their life in the risk.In my viewpoint,if possible the show timings should be changed
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 of banning . Let me explain the situation to you as I am having a keen interest in adventure sports so
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 show fascinates me a lot. I want that your newspaper should take some action as it’s a basic right of every citizen to perform and view whatever they like .
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 ,implications should be taken into consideration as a lot of
budget
Change to a plural noun
budgets

The singular countable noun budget follows the quantifier lot, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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 is spent on the making of
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 shows. Hoping to
listen
Add the preposition
tolisten

The phrase following the intransitive verb listen seems to be missing a preposition. Consider adding one.

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 a favourable response from your side. Yours faithfully, Dave.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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