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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an opinion, that
teenagers
 should try to
work
 during their free
time
 and do it
fo
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 free. Some people outline different benefits for youngsters and society as well. From my perspective, I totally disagree with the statement about the unpaid
work
 which can be done by
teenagers
 and there are several reasons why.
Firstly
, every
work
 must be paid or at least lead you to some general attributes of satisfaction. It’s the basic rule of the current working society, development of the economy and etc.
Teenagers
 must be motivated to
work
on
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 their free
time
 and having their own money will help them to feel the freedom and their attitude to life and
work
 can be changed.
Secondly
, what kind of
work
 can inexperienced
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 do? Definitely, it’s not intellectual or sophisticated
work
. Every employer will ask to do some physical
work
 or unpleasant activities, like loading, packing, cleaning, driving, and etc.
Thus
, it is a question
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 that’s diverse working is sufficient for
teenagers
, who will be used simply as a working force.
Moreover
, young people will not achieve any experience or get knowledge which will be useful in the future.
Finally
, free
time
 can be spent on hobbies or volunteer
work
, which is desirable. After all, nowadays there is
a
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high pressure on
teenagers
 about their study and
then
 future
work
 from their parents and society. Young people need
time
 to have a period to do nothing or at least have a vacation. To put it in a nutshell,
teenagers
 may try to
work
 if they want, but definitely not for free.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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