Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,
enviromental
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environmental
degradation is a global pandemic and policies ought to be formulated to deter the harsh consequences that
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from environmental pollution.I totally agree that
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personal involvement ,corporate industries and
government
funding are key to
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maintaining
maintain
environmental sanity. On the one hand,
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the community
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community
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should be tasked to protect their heritage through community lands,
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they must embrace safe agricultural
practises
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,
for
instance
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they ought to avoid farming
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the
riperian
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riparian
areas and avoid overstocking of domestic animals as both factors impact negatively to the
environment
.
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reliance
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firewoood
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firewood
for energy should be replaced through
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of renewable energy sources like solar and biogas,
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as forests will be preserved .
On the other hand
,
government
involvement cant be undermined as the sole mandate to conserve and rehabilitate the
environment
is a
government
's task.On top of
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civic education on
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of
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management should be a
government
task through funding and establishing autonomous institutions like National
Environment
Management Authority to safeguard the surrounding.
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manufacturing companies should embrace
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technology on how to manage their wastes ,
for instance
in France ,before a company is licensed to operate it must share its plan on waste management with the
government
to assess its impact on the
environment
,if it passes the
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threshold
,the company gets a green light to operate.
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private public
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partnership is another
appoach
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approach
that can be used to pull resources together towards a common goal. To recapitulate,while environmental degradation remains a local and international threat,
meaaures
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measures
should be formulated on how to conserve and rehabilitate the
environment
,
such
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a
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teamwork from the individual level,corporates institutions and
government
participation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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