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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
Nowadays,
enviromental
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environmental
 degradation is a global pandemic and policies ought to be formulated to deter the harsh consequences that
emanates
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 from environmental pollution.I totally agree that
,
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personal involvement ,corporate industries and
government
 funding are key to
maintaing
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maintaining
maintain
 environmental sanity. On the one hand,
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the community
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community
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communities
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 should be tasked to protect their heritage through community lands,
in
addition
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 they must embrace safe agricultural
practises
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practices
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,
for
instance
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 they ought to avoid farming
along
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 the
riperian
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riparian
 areas and avoid overstocking of domestic animals as both factors impact negatively to the
environment
.
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 that,
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 reliance
of
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firewoood
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firewood
 for energy should be replaced through
adoption
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the adoption
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 of renewable energy sources like solar and biogas,
this
 will be
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 as forests will be preserved .
On the other hand
,
government
 involvement cant be undermined as the sole mandate to conserve and rehabilitate the
environment
 is a
government
's task.On top of
this
 civic education on
benefits
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 of
environment
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 management should be a
government
 task through funding and establishing autonomous institutions like National
Environment
 Management Authority to safeguard the surrounding.
Moerover
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Moreover
 manufacturing companies should embrace
modern day
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 technology on how to manage their wastes ,
for instance
 in France ,before a company is licensed to operate it must share its plan on waste management with the
government
 to assess its impact on the
environment
,if it passes the
threshhold
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threshold
 ,the company gets a green light to operate.
In
addition
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private public
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 partnership is another
appoach
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approach
 that can be used to pull resources together towards a common goal. To recapitulate,while environmental degradation remains a local and international threat,
meaaures
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measures
 should be formulated on how to conserve and rehabilitate the
environment
,
such
 approaches
calls
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 for
a
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teamwork from the individual level,corporates institutions and
government
 participation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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