Some people think that the government Is wasting money on the arts and that the money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree?

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Arts
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can help to bring out
creativity
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. Some
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believe that the
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should not
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money
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on the
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.I totally disagree with
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statement.I think that the
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should
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required
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amount on
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to help
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of
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. There are many reasons why the
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should use
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money
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on
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arts
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and crafts.
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,
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can organize
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a seminar
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seminar
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seminars
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to help
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to learn about unique and creative activities.
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,the
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can create an opportunity for creative
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so that they can get a chance to showcase their art.
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,their country
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known
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in
world
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the world
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unique art creativity.To illustrate,
Dubai
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the Dubai
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governemnt
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government
spent
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on creating amazing
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world famous unique buildings.due to that today
dubai
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is known for its architecture.
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,the
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should not have to
spent
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unneccessary
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unnecessary
money
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on
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.I think every year,
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government
governments
governement
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the governement
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can plan
budget
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a budget
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for art and craft.by doing
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,
money
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will
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spent
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in
proper
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way and eventually it will help their country to grow and
people
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who believe that
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government
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the government
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is wasting
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can see a positive result and it might change their mindset. To sum up, undoubtedly the
government
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have to plan for how they can improve their nation and their
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by spending
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required
money
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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