Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

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level of violence in modern movies generating serious social problems. The main reason
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the child can get traumatized during
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of cruelty and violence, which can lead to big problems in the future and a viable solution is a control that
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of all, violent features that are glorified in films can have a detrimental impact on a person’s
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, especially
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and teenagers. Excessive exposure to violent
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watching
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will repeat it. It can lead to catastrophic effects in the feature,
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they can become robbers, murderers, or any kind of criminals and soon end up closing their future door, suffering the isolation and hatred of society. So, it is not
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problem, there are some solutions
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that. One of them is controlling
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child content. It means sorting everything
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we will prevent the problem. Here's an example from real life. My little brother watched a lot of YouTube on his smart TV. We did not control him in any way and did not monitor what he watched. One day I noticed that he behaves strangely, speaks incomprehensible enemies, communicates little and wants to watch more TV. Once I noticed that he was watching terrible monsters on YouTube and he liked it. It was just a disgusting monster called lilac-headed and he definitely puzzled my brother's brain. From that day on, I forbade him to watch the video with lilac-heads and followed him and in the
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it led to good results. To conclude,
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in film can have a detrimental impact on a person’s
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, especially
children
and teenagers.
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of child’s content and eliminate
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitization
  • empathy
  • aggressive behaviors
  • imitation
  • antisocial behavior
  • normalization
  • climate of fear
  • perceptions
  • mental health
  • aggression
  • emotional regulation
  • trauma-related symptoms
  • age ratings
  • critical viewing skills
  • nonviolent entertainment
  • film industry
  • regulate
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