Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?
Nowadays more and more people think
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the child can get traumatized during scenes
of cruelty and violence, which can lead to big problems in the future and a viable solution is a control that children
do not watch such
films.
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of all, violent features that are glorified in films can have a detrimental impact on a person’s behavior
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children
and teenagers. Excessive exposure to violent scenes
in films can cause a person to be more aggressive, lose his sense of reality and have no sympathy with the victims. Young
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children
. Thus
, if we eliminate the original cause, then
we will prevent the problem. Here's an example from real life. My little brother watched a lot of YouTube on his smart TV. We did not control him in any way and did not monitor what he watched. One day I noticed that he behaves strangely, speaks incomprehensible enemies, communicates little and wants to watch more TV. Once I noticed that he was watching terrible monsters on YouTube and he liked it. It was just a disgusting monster called lilac-headed and he definitely puzzled my brother's brain. From that day on, I forbade him to watch the video with lilac-heads and followed him and in the end
it led to good results.
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