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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make ? Has this been a positive or negative development ?

#people #technology #relationships #development
Certainly,
technology
 has created facilities to make relationships all over the
world
 by connecting
people
 globally. In spite of having some issues,
technology
 has lots of positive aspects by influencing
people
's modern lives and the
world
 becomes closer.
To begin
 with, by using
technology
 ,
people
 are connecting with their relatives without making face to face contact. They rarely need to go anywhere for
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the meeting
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meeting
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meetings
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.
Secondly
, it has reformed the structure of job, education and business sectors that
people
 could not imagine just two decades before. For
an
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example, during COVID-!9 ,
people
 are attending offices, classes from home
by
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online.
In addition
, we the
people
 can share our experiences as well as personal information through social media. So, the importance of advanced
technology
 is immeasurable.
However
, due to
internet
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the internet
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, the
world
 is going through some challenges. Excessive use of
internet
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the internet
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 is a bad habit for children
that is
 very common
now a days
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nowadays
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.
Moreover
, they get addicted
in
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to
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 games and other bad sites that
precisely
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are precisely
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 not good for children even for
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an adult
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adult
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adults
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.
Furthermore
, the rate of
cyber crime
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cybercrime
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 is increasing drastically.
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Cyber crime
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 itself is a threat to the modern
world
. It flashes the secret information
can
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that can
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 cause economical harm.
Consequently
 ,
modern
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the modern
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world
 with
technology
 is not safe. To end up with, in spite of having some negative aspects ,
technology
 is a
bless
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 to the
people
 as well as all over the
world
. It has created a revolution for the development of communicating and making the
world
 closer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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