Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make ? Has this been a positive or negative development ?

Certainly,
technology
has created facilities to make relationships all over the
world
by connecting
people
globally. In spite of having some issues,
technology
has lots of positive aspects by influencing
people
's modern lives and the
world
becomes closer.
To begin
with, by using
technology
,
people
are connecting with their relatives without making face to face contact. They rarely need to go anywhere for
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the meeting
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meeting
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.
Secondly
, it has reformed the structure of job, education and business sectors that
people
could not imagine just two decades before. For
an
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example, during COVID-!9 ,
people
are attending offices, classes from home
by
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online.
In addition
, we the
people
can share our experiences as well as personal information through social media. So, the importance of advanced
technology
is immeasurable.
However
, due to
internet
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the internet
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, the
world
is going through some challenges. Excessive use of
internet
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the internet
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is a bad habit for children
that is
very common
now a days
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nowadays
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.
Moreover
, they get addicted
in
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games and other bad sites that
precisely
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not good for children even for
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an adult
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adult
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.
Furthermore
, the rate of
cyber crime
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is increasing drastically.
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itself is a threat to the modern
world
. It flashes the secret information
can
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cause economical harm.
Consequently
,
modern
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world
with
technology
is not safe. To end up with, in spite of having some negative aspects ,
technology
is a
bless
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to the
people
as well as all over the
world
. It has created a revolution for the development of communicating and making the
world
closer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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