There are some people who believe that family members are very important in our life while other says that friends are more important .Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

While

many believe that relatives are more important than

friends

, others disagree and think the opposite. Personally, I prioritise family members first since they have been supporting me much longer than any of my

friends

have ever been. Nowadays, many are stating that they care very much about the people in their family rather than those in their friend groups for numerous reasons.

Firstly

, they have much more unforgettable history and memories with their parents, siblings, or children.

For instance

, notable moments like when their sister or brother were born, or stories of their own birth told many times by their mother and father.

Secondly

, family members have an unbreakable bond with each other. To put it simply, there is no way of getting rid of the same DNA shared by family members.

Nevertheless

, there are people who think that

friends

play a more impactful role in their lives. Some might not have a very healthy, even toxic relationship with their family.

For example

, those who are victims of abusive guardians in their childhood. Another reason is simply because they have built much stronger relations with their buddies. Maybe their

bestfriends

Correct your spelling

best friends

understand them better, accept their quirkiness, or even love them unconditionally. In conclusion, I agree with the view that family relations have bigger value in our lives compared to friendship because of essential factors

such

as historical memories and stronger bonds. Even so, it is

also

valid for some to feel like

friends

are more necessary to them.

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supported main points

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clear comprehensive ideas

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5

7.5

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

7.5

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

7.5

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

7.5

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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