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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Health
care
 is the most significant primary requirement and necessity, for an individual residing in any
country
. It is always a debatable issue whether the
Government
 of a
country
 should provide medical
services
 free of
cost
 to its Citizens, yet if the
services
 of hospitals and
doctors
 are very costly. I agree that Govt. should be willing to provide free
health
care
facilities
 to all its population. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall elucidate the factors that will lead the Govt. to provide these
facilities
. On the one hand, Most of the
country
's population especially the underprivileged across the world in these times of epidemic, covid 19 crisis, are struggling to receive hospital and pharmacy
services
 because of shortages like Testing with different machines, oxygen cylinders, ventilators and oxygen concentrators.
Moreover
, with an increasingly huge number of cases reported on a daily basis,
doctors
 and nurses find it difficult to cope with the limited
health
care
 infrastructure
facilities
 and are under constant pressure to improve it, by building new, as well as expanding the capacities of existing
facilities
.
Consequently
, more General public, who are diagnosed with diseases are not able to receive treatment.
Therefore
,
Government
 should assist these underprivileged countrymen, as well as other people confronting service shortages, with support and cooperation by building more infrastructure and hiring qualified
doctors
 and nurses at no
cost
,
subsequently
, to ease the burden on hospital and public
health
care
 centres. On other hand, the High-
Cost
services
 of
doctors
 and treatments are not been afforded by many Common people who work on company payrolls, like the treatment of cancer with chemotherapy and open-heart surgery along with stem installation, which
cost
 thousands of dollars in single time.
Furthermore
, these people expect Authorities to support them and provide all medical
facilities
 starting from all testing,
doctors
 check-up as well as and organ transplants.
Thus
,
Government
 should provide all healthcare
facilities
 to all its citizens, at no
cost
. I conclude, that because most of the
country
's population are in low and middle-income groups. So,
Government
 should take all responsibility for medical
services
 including all high-
cost
 treatments like organ transplants and other's
facilities
 with no bill payment.
As a result
, countrymen feel happy and satisfied from authorities for receiving all
health
care
services
 at no
cost
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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