Both governments and individuals are spending vast amounts of money protecting animals and their habitat. This money could be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care.To what extent do you agree?

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world, they are equally important for our survival.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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biodiversity
ecosystem services
ethical imperative
conservation
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sustainable development
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