Increasing numbers of students are going to university instead of working after high school. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who do this.

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It is a well-knowing fact that more and more young
people
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tend to get a high
education
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rather than go to work. Obviously, there are pros and cons
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trend. The main thing that needs to be said is that university gives
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diverse range of possibilities to young men after graduation.
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, students get a diploma, which means, they get the theoretical knowledge of the future profession and they are ready to become specialists in
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, it is a
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fact that the majority of
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higher
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are better paid than
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who didn't
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from
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universities. And
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,
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gives
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the chance to get
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intellectual and sophisticated work. No one can be a
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lawyer
or a medicine worker without basic educational background.
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, we can observe that there are
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some
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disadvantages
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universities after high school.
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with, if kids already know what kind of job they want to do and if doing
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job they don't need a diploma,
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why should they spend time on
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, when they can already go working.
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, working means freedom via
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receiving
money from the
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employers
and it's almost impossible to work full day during the educational process.
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, sometimes a diploma is insufficient for some companies, they are looking for
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expierenced
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experienced
employees. To sum up,
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there are some strong and weak points of going to university and students have to decide what is important for them, what is their attitude to all these reasons.
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