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In recent times, economic growth has helped many become richer, both in developed and developing countries. However, those in developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this? What can be learned from this?

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We cannot deny that economic
growth
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 is of significant importance to indicate the quality of
people
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’s
life
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 in all
countries
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. Recently, the
growth
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 of global economics influences an increase in the number of the richer, both in developed and developing
countries
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.
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, their mental health is not as good as expected when comparing
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 the past. A primary factor is
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 fact that those have
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 more pressures from their
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 that they neglect to develop their personal emotions themselves
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 as
happiness
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, while they concentrate on how to gain more money or salaries each day. Most
people
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 in developed
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 seem to lack
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 to make themselves happier as they try to make them become
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richer;
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, individuals nowadays seem to be less happy. Recently, many growing companies have dealt with
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plenty of
work
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 owing to worldwide economic
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.
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, the more
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 become richer, the more demands they have.
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 leads to the increasing amount of
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 in most of the companies.
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, workers,
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 representing normal
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, have had a lot of stress from their
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. Their stress can reduce their
happiness
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 level which has unsatisfied effects on the overall
happiness
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 of a whole country.
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, understanding a key reason making
people
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 seem less happy is one of many results obtaining from
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situation
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 helps design a way of improving a current
situation
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. In conclusion, the recent
growth
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 of global economics affects current
people
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’s
happiness
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 in developed
countries
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 which do not seem to be as same happy as in the past.
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, what
people
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 learn from
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situation
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 is a major reason why
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situation
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 occurs. It leads to the way
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government management playing a crucial role in the development of overall individual
happiness
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Material wealth
  • Affluent societies
  • Social cohesion
  • Isolation and loneliness
  • Work-related stress
  • Professional expectations
  • Aspirations and reality
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Consumerism
  • Comparison
  • Life balance
  • Mental well-being
  • Community relationships
  • Sustainable development
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