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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#computers #education #people #trend #consequences
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 automation. because of the significant improvement
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 globalization is
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rapidly
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people
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foreign
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helpful
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 are being used more in education. as well as the poor countries are facing the problem of
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 some drawbacks are available like the illegal activities easily handling through
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effected
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 very rapidly. when we are comparing
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 the trend of dressing sense changed. And
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traditional
 lovers that mean the people who like to live in a classical way will be
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destroyed
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 IT. the younger
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generation
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 the
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necessary
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business
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worldwide
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world wide
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on the other hand
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draw backs
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also
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 the people who dealing the IT how they using in the
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decide
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