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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages? *Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.*

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There is no doubt in saying that automated technology has been overpowering humans since the 21st century and shall carry the legacy in the coming years.
However
, automation in
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mobile
vehicles
 can have abrupt challenges making it impossible for
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humans to be totally replaced by robots, as we shall see in
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First
 and foremost, one challenging factor in self-driven automobiles is that they should have the similar level of visuality that humans possess.
In other words
, there must be consistent training and testing algorithms to analyse and detect objects from the variable distance.
This
 requires strong manufacturing and logical programming, which if fails, can lead to uncertain catastrophe.
For instance
,
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 robotic car invented a year ago obstructed two pedestrians by overlooking them, possibly due to inconsistent testing trails.
Such
 accidents contribute to the fact that a little intervention of
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 is still a necessity. Another point to consider is to be mandatorily being techno-savvy for commuting.
This
 could not be applicable to
a certain groups
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 of people like senior citizens. Adhering to
such
 developments shall demotivate their will to travel as they might not be habituated.
This
 is because they, as a passenger, derive the tendency to interact with the driver informally every time they commute, which is eliminated in robot-controlled
vehicles
.
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 they might end up
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reaching
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an altogether different destination, right opposite to their plan.
Therefore
,
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 demotivation can lead to
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 overall effect on their well-being,
thus
 considering human-controlled
vehicles
 to be a more thoughtful alternative. In sum,
although
 modern advancements have left a little or no place for human beings as in
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 of automated
vehicles
, situations like ill-programming and dissatisfied age-group raise a concern of potential danger and morality.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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