Using animals to test the safety of cosmetics and drugs used for medical reason is never acceptable. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Over the past few decades, lots of experiments happened on
animals
to test new
products
on them to make sure it is safe for humans concluding life-saving
drugs
or cosmetic
products
,
personally
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,personally

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I disagree with these barbarous experiments and lots of people all around the world don't know about
this
. It is unacceptable, for cosmetic
products
to kill and torture
animals
, somehow they considerate
animals
life less valuable than a human life so we have no right to do
this
for our benefit
for example
to make an eyelash there are hundreds of experiments on mouses and lots of them die or get really strong illnesses.
On the other hand
, there is no doubt that we need special
drugs
to cure our diseases and animal testing helps scientists to make vaccines, pills and medicines. They provide effective
drugs
against cancer, Alzheimer even mental health diseases to cure sleep deprivation or depression so it is clear that humans life depends on
this
experiment on
animals
. In conclusion, I disagree with these operations for making beauty
products
,
however
, we need controllable tests for making life-saving
drugs
.
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