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Using animals to test the safety of cosmetics and drugs used for medical reason is never acceptable. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#animals #test #safety #cosmetics #drugs #reason
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Over the past few decades, lots of experiments happened on
animals
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 to test new
products
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 on them to make sure it is safe for humans concluding life-saving
drugs
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 or cosmetic
products
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,
personally
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,personally
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 I disagree with these barbarous experiments and lots of people all around the world don't know about
this
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. It is unacceptable, for cosmetic
products
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 to kill and torture
animals
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, somehow they considerate
animals
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 life less valuable than a human life so we have no right to do
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 for our benefit
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 to make an eyelash there are hundreds of experiments on mouses and lots of them die or get really strong illnesses.
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, there is no doubt that we need special
drugs
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 to cure our diseases and animal testing helps scientists to make vaccines, pills and medicines. They provide effective
drugs
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 against cancer, Alzheimer even mental health diseases to cure sleep deprivation or depression so it is clear that humans life depends on
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 experiment on
animals
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. In conclusion, I disagree with these operations for making beauty
products
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,
however
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, we need controllable tests for making life-saving
drugs
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