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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree or disagree?

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*Universities should allocate the same amount of money to their
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activities
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 as they allocate to their
libraries
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. Do you agree or disagree? * While assigning a budget for
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activities
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 in study institutions ,
sports
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activities
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 should be given the same importance as it is given to other things. I completely agree with
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 as money should be distributed equally to all departments. On the one hand,
Studies
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 are the most integral part of the student's life either that should be in university or in school. But
sports
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activities
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 should be treated equally as they encourage the individuals to be fit and healthy. If a student is good at
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 and average in
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 it helps the student to be an all-rounder performer. There are various
sports
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 tournaments that help
students
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 to perform in Inter-University tournaments or even at the national level. Fortunately, it will help universities
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 to enhance their reputation. In order to support
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, I will take an example, MNSS is well known for the path and the opportunities they provide to their
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 to perform in
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activities
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. Many eminent
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 personalities have done their education and
sports
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 training from there.
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,
Libraries
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 are as important as
sports
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activities
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. While performing
sports
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activities
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students
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 should
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 spare time to study and perform well in exams too.
Libraries
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 help
students
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 to gather more information about a specific topic, and they can even read newspapers
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 to gather the latest news information.
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, it
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 helps
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 to have a consolidated and quiet place to concentrate on their
studies
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. In conclusion, while the allocation of budget both
libraries
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, and
sports
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activities
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 should be given equal importance as it helps institutions to maintain their reputation even in
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, and
sports
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activities
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also
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