Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
The pronoun I should always be capitalized.
It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction that. Consider removing the comma.
The word selection doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction because. Consider removing the comma.
It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
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