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Investment in local amenities such as leisure centres is the best way for the government to foster a good community spirit. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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A good community
spirit
 can certainly be promoted by various means, including investment in local
amenities
such
 as leisure complexes. While I agree that
this
 approach is worthwhile, it is not necessarily the best, as there are other equally important strategies. Local
amenities
 like leisure complexes are important for bringing
people
 of all ages together and for providing them with opportunities to mingle with friends and meet new
people
. As well as facilities,
such
 centres can provide a wide range of activities like swimming clubs and yoga classes as well as art classes, which give
people
 the chance to meet old and new friends and strengthen the local community
spirit
. Other
amenities
such
 as libraries that are open to the public can
also
 play a role in developing a community. Other measures that are
also
 useful are holding local festivals and fun days, not just in parks but in streets that are closed off to traffic for the day or weekend. In fact, any activity that involves local
people
 coming together,
such
 as volunteering in the clean-up of local neighbourhoods or tidying up local spaces, is worthwhile. Another important strategy is the design of local neighbourhoods. Unfortunately, the enormous pressure to increase accommodation for growing populations means that there is less space for houses with gardens.
However
, it is possible to provide well-maintained open spaces that attract local
people
 along with venues to give them a chance to interact with each other, like local shops
instead
 of large supermarkets, all of which can nurture a local identity and
spirit
. In conclusion, investing in local
amenities
 is one among many approaches that can contribute to the fostering of a good
spirit
 within communities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • ammunities
  • leisure centre
  • sense of togetherness
  • boost the local economy
  • inclusive events
  • diverse range
  • instil a sense of pride
  • shared identity
  • accessibility and connectivity
  • public green spaces
  • community bonding
  • frequent community service projects
  • community-based educational programs
  • promotes physical health
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