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Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#development #internet #libraries
Examinations are one of the common of measuring learning in the education
system
 throughout the world.In my opinion, we should consider other options too and use other ways to examine
students
besides
 taking a test.
First
 of all, our world is progressing year after year, but, we did not change our basic education
system
. some industrialise countries try to find a new way to measure literacy. At the elementary level, they prevent giving their student a score.
As a result
,
students
 had higher self-confidence and they did not have exam's anxiety so they leant better and passed their courses faster
also
, they did not face punishments.
However
, there was a big problem, they did not know how to gave sits to new
students
 at universities
in addition
, governments couldn't cancel examination's mark
system
 they had to use old traditional exams to ranked the
students
 after that, many
students
 had issues with taking a test because they did not know about exam's techniques
then
, the average number of scores drop down
although
,
students
 had the ability to pass the test with a higher mark. In conclusion, I agree with the change in our educational
system
although
 exams have some benefits too. so I think we should use a mix of methods and try to consider other ways to measure our society because our experiments indicate to us we need exams
although
 there are some disadvantages.
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