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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas.

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Nowadays supermarkets
offer
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food
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 from everywhere. There are
people
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 who claim that these shops should only sell local products
instead
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 of offering options from other parts of the world. While importing
food
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 from other countries has its cons like a bigger footprint, it
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 allows
people
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 to eat the
food
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 that they want. 
Firstly
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, it is true that when
food
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 is brought from other parts of the world, the footprint of producing that product  increases.
For example
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, the meat
that is
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 produced for consumption, if it has to travel thousands of miles, the foodprint of having made
this
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 is much bigger than if it is brought from local crops.
On the other hand
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, some of the
food
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 that society eats more does not grow everywhere. It has to be bought from other countries. Even though bananas do not grow in the UK, they are part of our diet so supermarkets have to
offer
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it
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them
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 because if not
people
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 will go to a place where they can find what they want. 
In addition
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 to
this
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, one of the biggest reasons to
offer
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food
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 from overseas is because is cheaper than the one
that is
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 produced in the UK.
This
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 gives
people
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 access to some
food
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 that they could not afford if shops only
offer
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 local
food
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 because there are not enough cows in the UK for everybody so they have to buy it from countries that have more. In conclusion,
People
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 should try to buy
food
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 from their own areas because is better for the planet but
also
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 at
this
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 moment is not possible because our needs are bigger than what our lands can
offer
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.

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