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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 few decades after inventing and spreading TV and
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 all over the world we can observe a serious public discussion about
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 role and significance of
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 and papers. How does reading influence people’s imagination and
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 skills? Or has TV and video the same effect? For me the answer is obvious:
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 and reading are vital and I will analyze the reasons in
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 of all, literature works and films are genres that assume totally different ways of giving information. A written text has to tell a story and express an essence by means of words and a reader is forced to use his imagination to recreate the whole world of things and people, their emotions and thoughts.
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 is always a personal view for everyone and it strongly depends on one’s lifetime experience and
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 you visualize the characters and the environment. TV and films provide
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 picture for an audience, that implies a passive consuming of
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content and there are few possibilities for viewer’s fantasies. Only a book gives you
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plenty of time to stop and think, sometimes to reflect, not the movie does. Without a doubt, only a written form has an advantage of a limitless plot, a direct transmission of
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 ideas and feelings to readers’ minds.
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,
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 skills can definitely be improved from reading.
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 of films,
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 utilize all capacity and richness of grammatical structures and vocabulary. Literature serves as a global tool for saving a
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 and
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knowledge. By regular using
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 people expand their vocabulary, master complex
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literacy. In fact, only a process of reading is able to activate the parts of
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 brain that
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 you to memorize and structure
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 in the most effective way. Apparently, just watching and listening makes it more difficult for people to gain knowledge and enhance their communication potential. In conclusion, I strongly believe that reading is an essential and vital instrument for humans to save and enrich their languages and develop creativity and thinking abilities, as well as to upgrade their communication skills
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