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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Physical newspapers or books will not be paid for because
people
 reading online freely.
Although
less
Correct quantifier usage
fewer
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 and fewer
people
 would buy newspapers and books which would potentially disappear. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement that no one would read everything without paying because I believe that high quality of
knowledge
 is worth paying for it.
Firstly
, useful or high-quality reports or data should be charged because
this
 is intellectual property that can contribute to various purposes.
For example
, the well-known magazine: “the economist” is the most prestigious and word-of-mouth magazine. The cutting-edge content and detailed analyzed reports are so knowledgeable that many institutes select it as class material.
This
knowledge
 is edited by tons of experts and journalists.
People
 should pay for it,
thus
 the publisher of the Economist can be sustained and produce better articles to influence
people
.
Secondly
,
people
 read free content because that data could be easily gained. If you would like to gain professional
knowledge
, you should subscribe or purchase it.
For example
, sometimes articles in websites that I have already read the maximum number of articles, but those sites will prompt me to purchase a subscription to continue reading and I am often very eager to purchase a subscription because I know from the previous samples that it is a high-quality news source. In sum, I agree that printed newspapers will disappear, while
knowledge
 still exists. It just migrated from the printed versions to online formats.
Peoplepeople
Correct your spelling
People people
 who want to gain deeper
knowledge
, still need to pay for it to gain the
knowledge
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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