These days, we are seeing incresing amount of violence on the television, and this is having negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree.

Television

is one of the many products of technology in the 20th century, it is one of the many ways

children

learn and are able

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to get conversant with the world around them.

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the increase in the amount of

violence

aired on

television

is very alarming as they have caused negative changes in their behaviour and

also

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emotional and mental health. As

such

I agree that the increase in

violence

has a negative effect on

children

.

Firstly

, it causes

children

to develop behavioural changes (

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aggressiveness

and

violence

) due to what they watch.

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it is evident that

children

copy what they see

everyday

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, as

such

watching

this

kind of

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tend to

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influence

their daily response to issues and situations.

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shows that

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television

shows need to be put in check to reduce

agressive

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aggressive

behaviour in

children

. In all

children

need protection from

this

increased

television

violence

. The

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continuous

exposure of

children

to

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kind of violent

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has a negative effect on their mental and emotional health.

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children

become sacred after eating horror movies or films with lots of

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fights

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, they feel like something is coming to attack them.

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in many ways can not be good for them emotionally. To sum it up, I think it is better to raise

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children

and confident

children

than

children

engulfed in fear because of

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on

television

. To conclude, the many

violence

aired on

television

has proved negative. Because of their behavioural, emotional and mental influence on

children

, and has

such

has reduced the ability to raise

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Adults. To

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many changes

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to be put in place to help reduce

this

.