These days, we are seeing incresing amount of violence on the television, and this is having negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree.

Television

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is one of the many products of technology in the 20th century, it is one of the many ways

children

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learn and are able

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to get conversant with the world around them.

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the increase in the amount of

violence

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aired on

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is very alarming as they have caused negative changes in their behaviour and

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emotional and mental health. As

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I agree that the increase in

violence

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has a negative effect on

children

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.

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, it causes

children

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to develop behavioural changes (

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aggressiveness

and

violence

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) due to what they watch.

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it is evident that

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copy what they see

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watching

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kind of

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tend to

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influence

their daily response to issues and situations.

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shows that

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television

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shows need to be put in check to reduce

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aggressive

behaviour in

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. In all

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need protection from

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increased

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violence

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. The

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continuous

exposure of

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to

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kind of violent

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has a negative effect on their mental and emotional health.

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children

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become sacred after eating horror movies or films with lots of

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, they feel like something is coming to attack them.

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in many ways can not be good for them emotionally. To sum it up, I think it is better to raise

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children

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and confident

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than

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engulfed in fear because of

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terrifying

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on

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. To conclude, the many

violence

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aired on

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has proved negative. Because of their behavioural, emotional and mental influence on

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, and has

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has reduced the ability to raise

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many changes

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to be put in place to help reduce

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