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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, more and more people are owning a private vehicle for transportation, mainly due to the convenience it offers. There are various problems like increase in
pollution
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 and health
issues
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, associated with increasing use of personal transport.
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, as the number of private vehicle owners increases there will be more strain on the
enviornment
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environment
 due to
pollution
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 and congestion,
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, as the number individuals owning a car increases, the traffic goes up,
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result
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 the time for travel goes up resulting in
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 amount of carbon emission.
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, as more
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vehicles are on the road, the government will be forced to expand roads, and thereby contribute to
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, there are many
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issues
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 caused due to decrease in physical activities that happen when using other methods of transport, namely walking and cycling.
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 there are many problems associated with over-reliance on private cars, these
issues
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 can be mitigated with simple initiatives from the administration. A proper infrastructure can be built for promoting cycling and walking
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,
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, special lanes for cyclists and footpaths could be implemented in cities. Additional rules can be laid out to increase the use of public transport and car-sharing. To illustrate,
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 Rule” implemented by the ministry of Delhi, and additional taxes for owning a four-wheeler would restrain people from buying a vehicle. In summary, more and more people are relying on private vehicles for transportation. There are many consequences associated with
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 over-reliance on cars, namely, health
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 and environmental
pollution
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.
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, these
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 can be mitigated by
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certain
 initiatives from the
governement
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government
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