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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Food and drinks that contain a high amount of sugar can cause humans to have health problems
such
 as obesity, diabetes, and heart disease. In order to encourage
people
 to consume less sugar. It has been a suggestion that those sugary products should be more expensive, so
people
 will purchase and consume less.
However
, in my point of view,
this
 method is not effective and has disadvantages to both consumers and manufacturers.
First
 of all, it can not be guaranteed that
this
 method will work with every individual.
People
 with good financial status will not be affected. They can still buy more and more products without noticing that the
price
 has changed.
On the other hand
,
people
 who have financial instability will suffer from
this
 change. Many sugary foods and beverages are the basic need for their diets
such
like
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 bread, pasta, and juice.
Moreover
, some of the ingredients are the costlier ones that they use to make things to sell for
living
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. If we increase the
price
 of those products it will create more load rather than make them healthy which make
this
 solution barking up the wrong tree.
Secondly
, in terms of business, the manufacturer will face a sales decline issue.
Although
,
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 some
people
 argue that the producer will have the same sale amount because they can earn more income from the
price
 that increased, most of the population are middle class and poor.
Therefore
, the loss will outweigh the income. In conclusion, raising the
price
 will not be a successful method of persuading
people
 to consume less sugar because it is not effective for everyone.
Also
, the producer will have
drawback
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 from losing income
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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