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Some people think that criminal behavior can have genetic reasons, while others believe that only circumstances can lead some people to crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often considered that genetics play a role in the
behaviour
 of most criminals.
However
, there are
also
people
 who opine
otherwise
. In
this
 essay, I would examine both these views and
also
 explain my opinion. On the one hand,
people
 generally believe that criminals usually get that
behaviour
 from their ancestors. Children grow up observing the
behaviour
 of their family
members
 and thereby learn how to live. If we observe, most of the children will usually follow
their
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 elder's footsteps.
Similarly
, if a family is corrupted the youth of the house will usually take the same steps.
Moreover
, if there are incidents of any of the family
members
 not being convicted for their crime, it encourages the young brains
further
 and they mould their personality
accordingly
.
However
,
this
 is not always the case and it happens mostly in uneducated & rural families with fierce backgrounds. Critics argue that crime is a natural human instinct that has been existing in societies for thousands of years. Usually, when
people
 cannot meet their basic necessities they work hard to meet their requirements.
However
, there will be some
people
 who cannot control the urge of fulfilling their needs and due to the lack of proper emotional agility, they tend to commit crimes like robbery or involve in illicit trade and harm the other
members
 of society or government. In my opinion, most of the time
people
 choose crime as an option of freeing themselves from the hard situations and
also
 there are some
people
 who inherit that violent
behaviour
 seeing their family
members
. So, I think that criminal
behaviour
 is not much linked to genetics
however
 it is much related to the
behaviour
 of the family
members
 and friends as well as their hard circumstances.
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