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some say that because many people are living much longer , the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably . to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays, some
people
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 argue , the
life
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 expectancy of many individuals is higher . So their retirement
age
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 from their job should
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 be increased . According to my opinion , I think that the
people
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's
age
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 at which they retire from
work
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 should not be raised , I totally disagree with their argument .
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 and foremost , humans after a certain
age
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 should not be able to
work
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 effectively . To illustrate , when a person gets old , its efficiency to do a job has been decreased and the younger population will be more effective in doing that jobs as compare to older ones .
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 , it leads to unemployment .
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 , even though if the old person get to retire from their job , many seats are free for toddlers to join but if they do not retire , youngsters will not be able to get any post .
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, nobody can beat the experience of oldsters .
An elder
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Elder
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people
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 should have the opportunity to spend
time
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 with their family . To demonstrate ,
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, a person do hard
work
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 in most of their
life
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 and do not have enough
time
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 to spend with their love ones , they should have right , when they get older
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 they can be at home with family members .
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 , they should have a chance to enjoy and collect good vibes in their
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 . As they are totally indulged in their
work
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 for whole day and night , they are tensed about their responsibilities , they have
time
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 to visit their friends and relatives and to be free from all responsibilities and tensions . In conclusion ,
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 oldsters are not able to
work
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 in a perfect way as they did when they were young , they have some
time
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 in their
life
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 to spend with their loved ones . I totally disagree with the
people
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's opinion who thought that the
age
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 of retirement should be increased .
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