Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It can be argued that the majority of
population
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do not make much effort about the climate
change
and their consequences on the environment. I wholeheartedly agree with
this
statement and I will explain the reasons why it seems a topic which
people
looks careless.
First
of all, there are many places around the world where are bigger concerns to solve
first
. Developing countries,
for example
, are starving in poverty and they do not have awareness of
this
world problem.
Moreover
, many of
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these
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people
are struggling to survive and the government, which has weakness
economic
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could not help with
this
concern too. Another possible reason why
people
do not contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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the
environment
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environmental
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impact is the
conflicted
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information. Some
people
already have the conscious about climate
change
and the impacts,
however
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it is still common
see
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to see
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people
discharging wrong things on the
reclycle
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recycle
bin.
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, in my buildings is
quite
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common
see
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, paper with plastic that cannot be
reclycle
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recycled
recycle
,
such
as pizza box in the paper garbage because does not have any explanation about what type of paper could be
disposal
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.
Secondly
, there are some objects that are extremely harmful to the environment , but it is
ridiculous
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cheaper than the 'green' sustainable version of the same product. Who does never buy something from China just because is cheaper, even though everybody knows that they have
slavory
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slavery
savoury
labour
.
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In addition
, governments, who has the power to
change
this
situation, have done the minimum because there
are
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a lot of lobby behind the scenes where damaging companies pay for elections campaign and they can manipulate the laws to adequate their interests. To conclude, I believe there are some regions in the world where
this
is not the most important topic to matter and some
people
do not have
properly
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information to
change
their habits.
Moreover
, there are few products that the price make some
people
buy even knowing how bad
this
situation is. Governments should
also
change
there
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regulations to avoid
lobbism
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lobbyism
to protect
the
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humanity
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interest
instead
of selling to detrimental companies.
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  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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